There once was a boy with a tan teddy bear. The kids name was Jon he never went any were with out his bear. One day Jon and his family were walking around in the city. He was looking at something with is parents and drooped the bear on the sidewalk and did not notice it. He finally realized that he drooped it in the car but they could not go back. A kid how lives in the city found it and took it home and sow a name on it. For a hole week he asked around to find the owner. One month later he found Jon in the cit looking for it.
Ooo, how lucky Jon was in the end Michael and what a wonderful reunion I bet it was. What do you think his reaction would have been? And what about the boy who found the teddy? How would he have felt?
Well done and keep rising to the Challenge.
Dear Mike,
Nice job on your first post. I like how you described the color of the bear and you gave your first character a name. I’m glad Jon found his bear at the end. The next time you might want to give the second character a name too, so the readers can connect with him. Keep up the good work!
Mrs. Schmidt
Thanks